Doesn't sound bad at all. Just sounds extremely unfinished. Like part of an intro or something.
You are not at my level. Instead of trying to tell me what my sound needs (which i already know because IT IS MY JOB) Try asking me some questions and giving me a little respect i might just save six years of your life.
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